How can i fix my sonnet ideas??!! ideas??!!?

wow, i never heard strawberry cheesecake described like that. lolz, i think it's a good and abstract piece. most poems are about relationships and nature, but i'm glad that you went out of the box to do one about strawberry cheesecake. however, i would play with punctuation. like where you say "there's nothing better, i can't resist". i believe it should be "there's nothing better; i can't resist". (notice the ";" and not the ","). and maybe you could call the piece "delicious concoction"? i hope this helps! <3